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Three Days in Termina - Five by Liefesa Three Days in Termina - Five by Liefesa
This is part five of the narrative poem "Three Days in Termina".
(This is the follow-up to an Ocarina of Time narrative poem- part one is here:[link])

The poem is split into 'cycles': each cycle covers three days in the land of Termina.

This is the Fifth Cycle: it covers Ikana Graveyard, Ikana Canyon, the well beneath Ikana, Ancient Castle of Ikana, Stone Tower, and Stone Tower Temple. Plus a small change in the final refrain, as the moon is finally stopped.

Submitted as a graphic for layout reasons ^^

Hope you like it! :la:

Characters, names and plot (c) Nintendo
Poem and all lyrics (c) me ^^
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Other Cycles

First Cycle
Second Cycle
Third Cycle
Fourth Cycle
Cycle Suspended (Part 6)
Beyond the Cycle (part 7)
Masquerade (bonus part)  
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Kienamaru Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
With a bolt,
to ruby's core
temple moves
'gainst natures law.

perhaps change moves to jolts? Ill think of another word for either law or core.
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2011
Good one, yeah. Maybe better to reorganise those few lines to have bolt and jolt as the main rhymes... ^^
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Vitality-Eminent Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
Lovelylovelylovely as always. :D I'm looking forward to the moon shenanigans~
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
^^ Thanks! :hug:
Moon next. Then the ending. ...then a bonus section for all the masks ^^
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Know-Kname Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
awesome cant wait for more :D
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
^^ Thanks!
Three parts left to come!
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PrissyKissy Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so great.....the Ikana area was always so creepy :fear: And I had forgotten all that was involved in going through it, but you just reminded me :)
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
:D I loved replaying it!
There's so much to do, and I still couldn't make room to mention getting info from the Garos using the Garo mask then battling them...
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HeadmistressMercedes Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Awesome as always! Love your description of Ikana Castle ^.^ Faved!
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
^^ Glad you liked it! And thanks for the :+fav: and Watch! :hug:
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MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
Lovely. :heart:

The part about the Stone Tower temple is as great as I expected, even if, maybe the boss part could have sounded even better if it was like this:
"Room of stone
winds of sand"
since, if you read it aloud (like I make for your poems :D ), it's a bit difficult to say "and" and soon after "sand", since it's almost like you repeat "and" two times.

But maybe it's just me, since English isn't my native language... ^^'

Anyway, awesome job as always, and the change in the refrain is really fitting: I was expecting it! ^^
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011
:D Thanks! :hug:

I did go through a couple of versions of that line and settled on that one. I guess when I read it I quite reduce the 'and' so it sounds a bit more like winds "un" sand, with an unreleased 'd' at the end of 'and'... if that makes sense?
But yeah, it will depend on your own pronunciation :)

I'm not sure when to release the Masks section- either at the very end, or before cycle six or cycle seven... Hmm...
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MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
Yes, it makes sense if you abbreviate it like that. ^^

About the masks section, I would like it at the end, but it's your choice. ;)
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011
Yeah... I just thought that after reading the conclusion to the story, the masks bit would seem too separate...
I'll decide soon. Mask bit is completed, and the other two bits are nearly completed: they have slightly different titles; not just Cycle Six etc. ^^
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MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
Do whatever you think it's better. ^^
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
I can't decide... :stupidme:
^^ I'll have a better think later!
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MajorasMasks Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011  Professional Artisan Crafter
:glomp:
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
:cuddle:
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Morning-Star-42 Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
That's brilliant! Your control of syllables and rhythm is wonderful, it just flows when you read it. Also, your wording gives a very soulful view on the Zelda world.
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011
Thank you! :D
I'm happy to bring Zelda further to life!
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Adder-Adz Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay! :D This is epic, not sure why but I think this is my favourite so far :P Although all are amazing of course! :) Can't wait for the next :dance:
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011
:w00t:
Thanks! I played through this section right before writing the second half of it. It's one of the best bits of MM ^^
Three parts left ^^
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Adder-Adz Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! :D Reading these really makes me want to replay MM now, even though I still have a half finished file of OoT I started around Christmas. Oh and 2 Wii games I got for Christmas, one of which I still haven't touched! :no:
I look forward to the next ones! :w00t:
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 15, 2011
:D
You should definitely replay MM. When I started I wasn't that enthusiastic coz I thought I could remember it too well... but it, of course, has been wonderful to revisit!
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Mephonix Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I can't wait for the next, with the trials, of the 3 masks, and get FIERCE DEITY mask... plus the battle of course with majora.... I like Majoras incarnation cause of the dances it does. LOL
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011
:D Thanks!
Majora's Incarnation is quite crazy! Zant kinda does something similar in TP...
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Mephonix Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yeah, true.... But nothing beats Majoras Moon walk. LOL!
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Liefesa Featured By Owner Feb 14, 2011
:rofl:
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